Would You Continue??

Thank you very much tutu! I defeniatly know that ANY story could always use more editing...I just wrote what I shared here in about 10 minutes and didn't edit at all before posting! lol. So it's still a rough draft!:)

I like being descriptive when I write! I'm glad you noticed!!!!!

The story I have in mind is KIND OF a suspense...but with a twist I'm not giving away any more!!!! lol

Hey again,
Now iam more curious to know what actually happened to the kitty. U have created a good suspense and now you got to tell us what happened next.
Well I dont think u need any editing here. Iam not a writer,so lets c what others have to say about it.
I hope u will complete the story and publish it as well. Wish u all the good luck!

Cheers,
Tutul

Let's just say...the cat knows something we (people) don't! lol

Believe me...if I ever get a story published my friends at mylot will hear about it! lol.

Thanks!!!

Yes, I already have an idea for this story...in fact I started it once before (in a completely different way)...and one day while I was typing some of it I realized I wasnt happy with it. So I thought up some new ways too approach it and I came up with this beginning this morning:) I'm much happier with it so far!

I actually forgot to add something to the beginning...so you can help me decide whether or not to add it!:P At the end of this I wanted to add something about a dog howling down the street or something...that sound good or do I have enough now?

Thanks loudcry!:)

A dog? Kids find animals very interesting. Is this a children's book?

No, it's not a childrens story.

The dog wouldn't actually be in the story, I would just be mentioning a dog howling...I think it may add to mystery as to why the cat freaked out.

Hmmm, well,do keep us mylotter updated about the book.Just be careful about copyright infringement problems as someone above has mentioned.

Thank you very much! I'm glad you like it!!

I do have many stories that I've started--sometimes it's just hard for me to finish....if I get stuck on one I start another! lol. I know thats bad but I work on each story every so often...they proceed a little bit at a time:)

Thanks suspenseful!:) The cat is NOT possessed:D hehe...I actually probably wouldn't do well with that considering it scares the crap out of me!:P

Nothing threw the cat against the tree-he did everything to himself just out of the fear. When he bumped into it as he was backin up he just reacted by grabbing on to it.

I'm glad you liked it!!!:D

Yes but what was he scared of? Evil neighboring pit bull perhaps? Maybe the neighbor is a drug dealer, someone shot at him, etc? My mind does more then cat getting lost, nice family that nothing happens to, taking responsibility for one's actions, etc. I wonder if this is about a cat kidnapping.
"Crazy lady with a screw loose loves cats, takes Starburst because she feels the owners are mean letting him outside."
That would be a good possibility.

LOL! Maybe I should add a crazy cat lady to my story!;P But nooo that's not what this story is about!

There are some things that I put in the beginning to show just how frightened the cat is...for example, he runs on a broken leg--which I woudl imagine takes effort! lol

The cat does fixate on the moon the most during his fit--and that does have to do with the story:D

A crazy cat lady would work, especially if the story is for families. Now I have to find out why the cat is fixated with the moon. The cat from outer space perhaps, wanting to return home?
Am I getting silly these days. That's the trouble with having a good imagination.
If you decide to continue the story, you could try joining one of the Yahoo writing critique groups, but make sure it is private membership only. I was on a couple when I first started writing with the intent to publish. That way you will avoid someone stealing your story and claiming it as their own.

lol there's nothing wrong with having a good imagination!!! Mine is really crazy too!:P lol

My story isn't really for kids/families--it'll get pretty graphic. It's more of a horror/suspense story.

Luckily my dad is interested in writing, so I wont have to post my whole story to get it edited and critiqued...my dad has no problem telling me if something is bad lol.

It was the cat that threw me and the family. I sort of like suspense stories and my dreams do run into the horror type. Good thing your dad is helping you. Me, I have to use a critique group or get a book on self-editing. I did join a couple, but one this girl who was not an experienced author did most of the critiques because those of us who were experienced authors or hoped to be were too busy writing. Good luck on your story. I suppose with lots of blood and gore, kids shouldn't read it anyway.

Well mine won't be really bloody...just kind of..violent I guess you could say lol. I dont know! It's hard to explain!!!!!!!!! lol But I can defeniatly garuntee it isn't a family story:P

My dad tries to get me to read self editing books but...I get so bored! lol.

Thank you!:D

I wasn't counting my words as I was typing, I did just let it flow and waited to see where it went naturally!:)

Yes, I would keep writing if someone gave me constructive critism...I would take it in, and if I agreed with them I would fix it...if I didn't I would either leave it how it is or just try to edit it myself a little bit.

This small section of the beginning doesn't give away what the story is about at all! I'm not too worried about my story getting stolen or anything. If I had to worry about it I guess my post here would help establish a time line...but really, I'm not too worried!

Did you at last like the story? lol
Thanks

.....Hi, You are a very nice person, I thought to myself, she is going to**** you out:o), but you were gentle. I had just heard about Chris Rock being sued for possibly stealing a woman's idea for his new movie. You are a talented person, you pay attention to detail and as one reads your copy, you feel you are there with the characters. You should have a very good book when you have completed it. What some
would call "a page turner". Good luck in your quest. Take care.

LOL! I saw no reason to be rude to you Plus..I'm not very good at it anyways lol.

Ooo I didn't know Chris Rock was a thief! That's something you don't want on yoru record lol.

Thank you artistry! I'm glad you liked it!!

Thanks Indy!! I'm glad you like it!!

In fact, Starburst is suppose to over shadow the family No one in this story (including starburst) are going to be important characters. I'm still deciding whether or not they will be mentioned again...Starburst MIGHT be, but I don't think the people will be!

Ooooooooooh even better!I love it when stories have little twists like that.
Im so upset at work right now, I think Im gonna write a mistery.

hehe, thank you!:P I just have to correct a smalle error in my last post because if I dont it'll drive me crazy...lol. I meant to say that no one in THIS part of the story is important...not the whole story! There will defeniatly be some important people in the story!:P

Why are you upset at work!?! Emotions can defeniatly help someone write a good story! lol

Well, the computers at my job arent working that well, and whenever I check my mail or here in mylot, it only lasts like 3 minutes in session and then kicks me out. Ill call it "The day the computers died"!!! The mistery of how someone grabbed a bat and destroyed the machines.

Hehehehe Im a bitg coo coo so dont mind me!

Happy Mylotting and your story is really looking good. Even has an observation to leave as a clue.

uh oh! Thats not good! lol. Sometimeas my computer runs really slow and I feel like I could just smash it up! But then I remember it'll cost me hundreds of dollars to get a new one so I don't...lol. PLUS, people at your work might look at you funny if you start bustin up the computers

Thank you!!!

hehehe tell me about it. Thats why I rather just write about it for my topsy turvey world Neilon. Thats a story I wrote and over there, anything can happen!Hehehehe see ya!
Take care!
Happy mylotting

lol! thats why I like writing fiction so much--you can write about anything, and go anywhere with it!! Someone smashing computers could turn into a mystery, horror, or a comedy! lol

hehehe well other than mystery I do like also the horror genre a lot. In movies, literature, you name it!
And I kinda have this story that I want to write out but don t know exactly how to put it ( I hate writter´s block ), aside from the smaish computers mystery, I wanted to create this thriller script or book were its about these people in a call center (only a few) that they get really weird calls but then realizde that they are actually dead people.
Yeah I know, kinda used up but trying to think of how I can make it differently.

I like horrors too--I read Stephen King a lot. I love the mystery/suspense police thrillers lol

I HATE Writers Block too!!! Makes me crazy!!

Ooo that does sound scary..I'm not sure something like that has ever been done in a call center--so you could defeniatly figure out ways to make ti difference...UMMMMM...I dont like ghosts soooo, no offense, I might not read your story;P lol

Hehehehehe well maybe in other features its appeared just not in a call center... Ill try to figure it out.. my mins is running too fast on it too so we shall see.

How can you NOT like ghost stories? I personally dont believe that the dead are heare persay, but people do tend to get more creative with that topic than any other... though police thrillers and mysteries are making quite the comeback in books.

I know a friend who wrote something but I dont think he has published it because he´s afraid it might not be something so good..

Tell me what you think, he focused it on a call center as well, he just made it very similar to him.. I think it goes something like this, Im not quoting him but this is what I remember reading.

"Im too tired to stick around. The walls in my working place are just getting smaller and smaller to me. Im so tired of listening to people talk and talk... I should be in bed for heaven sakes... oh well, I cant complain, the pay is good and my shift will end soon enough", this is always my thought at this time of night.

I heard some hard footsteps our way, someone entered the floor, I had to get up and see what it was, it was Maury, she looked upset. "YOU GUYS!! stop what your doing and get your butts over here!... Maury, our lovely and pushy supervisor went running out again towards the reception. I was only wondering whatta heck was going on? it sure didnt seem like her, running around telling us to stop working unless it was a visit from the president or something.

"Look outside... what do you see?"

Sam: I dont see anything, is that why you pulled us off the floor?

Maury: Are you blind? look!

Maury opened the door.

Sam just stared outside... speechless he just turned around and left without saying a word.

"Maury, whats going on? Sam! hey!

(Sam hey) (Sam hey)... I heard my own voice outside.
Heading towards the door, I moved quietly yet fast, it was killing my curiousity to find out what it was, Maury moved away but kept staring...

"Muary", I said, "where´s the phonebooth?, I mean I cant see a thing its pitch black and......

I looked down, I looked right, left up and down again...

"Theres no parking lot."

It's not that I just dont like ghost stories...it's that ghosts scare the crap out of me!:P lol

That is defeniatly a very interesting premise!! Spooky! It'd be interesting to see where your friend goes with that story! I'm curious at what's happening to the characters!!

Well Im waiting for him to keep writting... Oh no I noticed that not everything that I wrote got posted... hold on."Theres no parking lot"Maury opened the door again... placed her hand on the ground."What happened here? where's the parking lot I cant see it..." as I was getting out to get a closer look."NO DONT"!...
Maury looked back, her eyes disturbingly wide. "Dont go out there". "There's no parking lot, there are no cars, theres nothing but blackness".
Maury got up, not being able to stop staring outside... she went back in "Dont any of you go out there".
I knealed to touch the ground...
Cold, vast, air....

Very creepy! It's defeniatly intriguing...how the heck does the whole ground just, disappear!?!?! lol. Can you imagine that actually happening too you!? No thank you!:P

Thank you very much!!! I'm glad you like it!

Right now I just write as a hobby. I've never tried to get anything published...but I am taking a creative writing class to improve my skills a bit!

Ooo, well if the woman did share an idea with him--then she needs to get some credit!

Well if I actually ever do finish a story, and want to try to get it published, I will defeniatly take your advice if I dont get it copyrighted!!

Thanks artistry!:)

Wow! I am suprised by that, I would think that orange would be nice and bright and pretty in bright moonlight!--thank you for letting me know that!!! I will defeniatly add that the cat has white too!!

I didn't mean to sound like the little girl saw the leg bend...mentioning it was for the readers benefit. When the little girl says the cat got hurt, to me she was only saying it because she's little, saw her cat fall out of a tree, and assumes. I'll try to edit it though, some how! lol

I'm not sure if I'll post more of it or not...maybe if there is a part I'm unhappy with I might ask for help on here. But I won't post the whole story here.

Thanks for the help!!!

the roomie is color blind - so she lives in a black and white world.

she kept telling me that one of our orange cats was lighter than the others, and one morning I saw them in the twilight where my color vision didn't work, and she was right. But both of them looked about the same color as Tony, who is a light brown tabby - a dilute brown, and on the cats really they didn't show up well except for the white.

Ooh I see! Well that is defeniatly an interesting piece of information to know for writing and stuff like that! That's my new thing I learned for the day! lol

Thanks!