I don't know if it is allowed but....
By sanuanu
@sanuanu (11235)
India
October 31, 2009 10:52pm CST
Let's see how do you guys take it. I know it is boring but it came out when I saw a girl in my office. You all know that I can only love a girl but cn'at flirt with her hence I only wrote this rhyme.
You are right, I have not proposed to her and to make the matter worse, these days I am not talking to her also!
So, here is the rhyme. It is written by me, I know it is borng but what are friends for... LOL!
Let's see how it goes
When I watched you first day
you were the only I wanted to say hi
As your eyes locked at me
your smile was obviously killing me
your words were like flowers
yes you are the most beautiful girl
you gave me the reason to smile
whenever I am sad
I think about you and all the sorrows are dead
Let's see when I can propose to you
so that I can be the happiest guy in the world
let's see!!!
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Very nice poem, I think you should give it to her and let her read it and then she will know how you feel.
@Canellita (12029)
• United States
2 Nov 09
What do you mean you can't flirt? Because it is work or because you don't know how? Write your little message in a card and give it to her and see what happens.
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
3 Nov 09
I used to flirt with the same girl. You won't belive that the first sentance I told her was like, "I am writing a love letter to you".This was a reply to the question she asked for what I was writing in my notepad!
It is just that when I feel that I am more than friend for a girl. I think that loosing her is more dangerous than flirtying!
@Canellita (12029)
• United States
4 Nov 09
That was a great response! What was her reply? Also, how long ago did this happen?
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@sid556 (30953)
• United States
3 Nov 09
Thats a sweet poem. Why aren't you guys talking anymore? I think you should start by talking to her and getting to know her. Who knows....maybe she feels the same about you. Maybe after you get to know her more , you could give her that poem. Even if this goes no further than friendship level I guarantee that she will be so flattered.
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
4 Nov 09
I am little shaky on giving the answer to this question and I would ask you to find out a discussion with the title "What happened before I wrote a poem!" and you will know the reason because it is a little long story. That means it will buy some of your time *sorry*!
@mommaj (23112)
• United States
1 Nov 09
It's a beautiful poem. I am sure she will like it. I think you should start talking to her again, or if you never talked to her, you ought to start talking to her. I wasn't clear on that part. If someone gave me a poem like that, I would expect them to ask me out on a date.
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
3 Nov 09
I think when I will give the edited and corrected version of this, you will again like it.
For you I have started a new discussion with the title "What happened before I wrote a poem!". Do please visit that discussion for the part where you were not clear!
Let's see, what I have in my mind to write on my life.
@paula27661 (15811)
• Australia
1 Nov 09
Hello sanuanu! How are you doing? Why are you not talking to this girl? I like the poem and I’m sure she will too but you should make some kind of social contact with her and ask her out to dinner or something, then you could give her the poem along with a red rose...Good luck, my friend it sounds like you are really keen on her so, all the best...
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
4 Nov 09
Hi paulla! I am fine, how are you?
For the second question you have to read the next discussion with the title "What happened before I wrote a poem!" discussed by me just after this discussion. Sorry, I am giving a little hard work to know the answers!
Once you will read that discussion you would understand that why have I written this poem! Trust me, now it is more important for me to say sorry to her rather than proposing her!
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
4 Nov 09
Ah, hi jenny! Changed your avatar. is it you?
I don't think that I can be a good guy for her but all I want to do is to send this poem to her because 4 years ago, I wrote a poem to a girl and you won't belive she was literly crying when she was leaving India!
@eLsMarie (4477)
• New Zealand
6 Nov 09
well i guess you post comes in three different scenarios but i prefer responding to this discussion and to your latest discussion here in this interest. i have read the poem, obviously, and i realized that my instincts are real. i don't want you to be offended but it really sounds that she doesn't feel the same way to you and your obliged to respect her decision than just ignoring her completely. be a man! i thought that you were the best of friends or something that's why i thought that the girl wasn't really not that open minded. try to fix everything while it isn't too late. it's hard to work in a certain place when you know that there's someone out there who has been bothering your thoughts.
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@lindiebiz (1006)
• Canada
2 Nov 09
Nice poem just needs a little touching up and it would be excellent
@purplealabaster (22085)
• United States
2 Nov 09
Why can't you talk with her or flirt with her? I would start with talking, and the flirting should flow naturally from there. You obviously are very attracted to her, so what is the harm in at least starting a conversation with her? The worst that can happen is that you find out that you two are not right for each other. The best that can happen is that you finally get the chance to propose to her, like you say in your poem. When you weight the two, to me the best that can happen definitely outweights the worst that can happen, but the choice is obviously yours. I wish you the best.
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@sanuanu (11235)
• India
3 Nov 09
yes, you are right. I used to flirt with this girl until I knew that I am in love with her.
I have started a discussion on the reasons of why I am not talking with her anymore! A little more effort you have to make as we are not allowed to post other discussion's link in a post! :-)
@getbrowser (1708)
• China
1 Nov 09
You have written a great love poem.
As you have said above, She hit you right between the eyes the moment you see her. I guess you should be a shy boy. Now that you have been addicted to her, so you can write down the poem and send it to the girl. Imagine it, when she has read your love poem, she may be touched beyond words.
Wish you success. Happy myLotting!
@moonchild1au (6237)
• Australia
1 Nov 09
That poem is very sweet...If a guy wrote something like that for me, it would definately put a smile on my face.
@maygodblessu44 (7336)
• India
8 Dec 09
Hello my friend sanuanu Ji,
Well, it is lovely poetic language. But I find nothing from her side. Why poets are one sided, only they express about their feelings.You wait to propose, what if she does not accept it. What will happen then.Please continue with yor poetry, I wish to listen some more. Poets do imagine things in advance.
May God bless You and have great time.
@maygodblessu44 (7336)
• India
9 Dec 09
Hello my friend sanuanu Ji,
So nice of you, I am with your feelings. Well begin is known as haf done. Now taht you have alraedy started, keep thinking and writing, even a small word in taht direction would help you to compose even much better. Let your feelings remain converted on paper in writing.
May god bless You and have a great time.
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@danitykane (3183)
• Philippines
1 Nov 09
I think it's beautiful.
I like the part "As your eyes locked at me your smile was obviously killing me" haha. It's good. For sure she'll appreciate it.
I like the part "As your eyes locked at me your smile was obviously killing me" haha. It's good. For sure she'll appreciate it.
@cuteafsal (92)
• India
1 Nov 09
Your poem's not bad.. But i gotta tell you that some girls might just take it as a very nice joke. So try to give the poem as joke or in a funny mood. Try to be more friendly with her before giving out the poem.
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@CathyLee2009 (429)
• China
1 Nov 09
you wrote a poem for a girl!I think it can prove you are fallen love with her.
but wait,if the girl knew it,what would she think of it?Some girls can be touched buy such a romantic thing,while some others don't like this style,they like something more realistic,for example,flowers,presents ,take part in parties and so on.So,it depends what style the girl belongs to,I think.Good luck!
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